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Write about this photo using our five senses: Smell,Feel, See,Hear and Taste. We had to make paragraphs that link to the other paragraph. Doing this will create an effect which will help make your writing flow and make it more easy to read.
WALT:Use paragraphs to link similar ideas together. Write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text. Use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect
I could barely walk to get a seat, as I did, I could hear the trees rustling and the wood floor creaking. I looked down as I saw the stained t-shirt that I hadn't washed in days. I couldn't move and my injuries were getting worse and worse, I was crying in pain as I begged for the pain and agony to stop.
I shouted as there were so many things that were going on. It was getting hard to breath and the crying wasn’t helping. I felt drowsy and drunk I stood up and started wobbling and shaking, as I dropped down hitting my head on the hardwood floor. There was a bright light that was getting brighter and brighter.
I woke up disorientated, "Where was I"? "Where did I go"? "How did I get here"? I had so many questions to ask, I wonder if could even escape this nightmare. I heard a man speaking outside, I started to mumble under my breath and it was getting hard to breathe. The footsteps started to get louder and louder. I couldn't take this anymore and I was losing my mind.
I had a feeling that they were going to take me away, keep me from touching the sunlight forever. He came in watching as I cried, making a mess on the floor. This was it I said to myself over and over again, my life's over.
Write about this photo using our five senses: Smell,Feel, See,Hear and Taste. We had to make paragraphs that link to the other paragraph. Doing this will create an effect which will help make your writing flow and make it more easy to read.
WALT:Use paragraphs to link similar ideas together. Write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text. Use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect
I could barely walk to get a seat, as I did, I could hear the trees rustling and the wood floor creaking. I looked down as I saw the stained t-shirt that I hadn't washed in days. I couldn't move and my injuries were getting worse and worse, I was crying in pain as I begged for the pain and agony to stop.
I shouted as there were so many things that were going on. It was getting hard to breath and the crying wasn’t helping. I felt drowsy and drunk I stood up and started wobbling and shaking, as I dropped down hitting my head on the hardwood floor. There was a bright light that was getting brighter and brighter.
I woke up disorientated, "Where was I"? "Where did I go"? "How did I get here"? I had so many questions to ask, I wonder if could even escape this nightmare. I heard a man speaking outside, I started to mumble under my breath and it was getting hard to breathe. The footsteps started to get louder and louder. I couldn't take this anymore and I was losing my mind.
I had a feeling that they were going to take me away, keep me from touching the sunlight forever. He came in watching as I cried, making a mess on the floor. This was it I said to myself over and over again, my life's over.
You have worked very hard on this Dion, well done. A great effort. You have used lots of descriptive words.
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