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Wednesday 30 August 2017

Green

Green
Green is the grass that brightens my day And Green is the praying mantis that eats Its prey. Green is the beans that i eat and green is the cabbage that smells like feet. Green is the emerald that I get from minecraft and green is the $20 that I got from an abandoned aircraft

I LOVE GREEN BECAUSE IT’S EXPENSIVE!

6 comments:

  1. Hey Dion I really liked how you gave heaps of information in just a couple sentences.When you said you eat green beans I wanted some green beans to eat. Maybe next time you could put some green pitures and green font.

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  2. Hey dion I like how you put good subscibing words. Also when you said I love green because it's expensive that was the funny part. But next time maybe you could put some full more full stops. Did you right this yourself or did you get help? Well anyways great work.

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  3. Hi Dion Really Like your work! Your Poem about Green is awesome it rhymes. Next time try making the words darker and easier to read great POEM!

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  4. Hi Dion it Lui I really like how your poem rhymes next time you should make your poem darker so people can read it clearly.

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  6. Hi Dion,I like how you have written a poem about green it flows nicely, my favourite part was 'green is the grass that brightens my day and green is the praying mantis that eats it prey' also next time you write a poem or anything can you please change the colour because I found it quite hard reading it.
    Sincerely Moni

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